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The bar chart shows information  about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The bar chart shows information  about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The chart gives data about the two most-liked lessons from two different schools. It can be seen clearly that the best-loved subjects are different between
School
 A and
School
B
. Sport has the highest score, compared to others.
While
 pupils at
School
B
 adore craft/drawing, it becomes the least interesting in
School
 A.
To begin
 with, sport
become
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becomes
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 the most attractive one, interacting 41 learners, 36 from
School
 A and 5 from
School
B
. It is followed by craft/drawing, which become the best subject in
School
B
, chosen by 25 children.
In contrast
, only 4
School
 A students choose
this
. For language, it is adored by 10 individuals from
School
B
, showing twice the number from
School
 A (5 people).
Additionally
, 16 learners from both schools choose social science, 6 learners from
School
 A and 10 students from
School
B
. Only 11 students, 9
school
Capitalize word
School
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 A novices and 2
School
B
 pupils, decided science as their favourite subject.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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