Some people think that exercise is the key to health. Others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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people
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believe that working out is
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the easyest
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thing a person can do to be healthy ,
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others think that
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you eat is essential .In my opinion,
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some
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think
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routine is
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perfict chooce
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perfect choice
for whoever wants to be well
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way . On other wards , physical
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is the best ,as it can help to do a
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other things at the same time .
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, they can read or listen to whatever they want
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doing physical activity .
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to do
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how to do it .
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why
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do agree with them ,as
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have the free
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, others think
food
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a significant
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role
since, if they do any
exercise
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with out
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without
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healthy
food
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,it would be
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ancient
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example
, when
people
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go to the gaym or do
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routine at
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their
homes ,
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body
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will need good
food
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or it
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be the
oposite
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opposite
instead
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of being healthy they
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will
be very fat .
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, they
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should
be careful
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with
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the a
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amount
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sugar
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because
, it is
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impossible
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good
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sheab
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shape
with a messy diet . for
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resone
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reason
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think eating healthy
food
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is necessary as well .
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all
people
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have
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different views
, i think ,both are
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important
since, to do
exercise
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with
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a bad
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diet will not help at all .
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Use more specific examples to illustrate your points clearly and support your arguments.
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The essay covers both sides of the argument, showing a balanced discussion.
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The introduction and conclusion are present, effectively framing the essay.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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