the graph shows the income of four cafes in New York over last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph shows the income of four cafes in New York over last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides information about the
income
trends of four cafes over the
last
year
. There are two basic general trends: downward and upward. As regards the
first,
the earnings for The Tea Room, were down over the
year
, falling significantly from almost $160,000 earnings a month to just under $50,000 in December.
By contrast
, the
income
for the other three cafes went up by varying degrees. There was
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in Cafe Cool's sales over the first ten months, followed by a sudden increase to $120,000.
Furthermore
, the
income
for both Internet Express and the Wi-Fi cafe
also
ended the
year
up in December. The former experienced a steady fall to June, but after that,
income
rose steadily ending the
year
at approximately $130,000 .
Likewise
, the trend for Wi-Fi was upward. Between January to July, earnings rose from #50,000 to nearly $100,000 and
then
rocketed to around $190,000. It is noticeable that the
income
for The Tea Room is lower in December than for the other three cafes.
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