You recently went to a concert and thought one of te singers was very good. You want to tell him hoe you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter - say how you feel about his performance -give details of your musical activities -explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
Dear Jack,
I'm writing to you to express my impressions of
last
night's concert. Briefly, it was amazing and possibly one of the best concerts I've ever attended.
There were so many things that made me excited, such
as the atmosphere, sound, and unity of all who had come. But the most amazing thing was your singing. I have never heard such
quality in live concerts despite I was on many. Your voice and how you shouted some parts of songs really gave me goosebumps.
Furthermore
, looking at how you perform on the scene gives me a lot of motivation, because I am a singer in my own band too. We are young and not famous yet of course, but gratefully to you, I know what I want to accomplish. Hence
you are so cool and famous, it is not a piece of cake for me to ask but I would like to suggest you to listen a few of our songs.
I'll be over the moon if you can give me feedback about my own performance. Such
as, where I can get better and what I can improve, like singing or communication with people in front of the scene.
Looking forward to visiting another concert of your band.
Yours faithfully, VladSubmitted by batashevge on
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph centers around a single idea. For example, separate your feelings about the concert and the request for feedback into distinct paragraphs for clarity.
Task Achievement
Consider providing more specific details about your musical activities to give the reader a clearer picture of your background.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately structured, adding a personal touch to the letter.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and respectful, which is suitable for this type of correspondence with a performer.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite