The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. an
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The chart represents the percentage of bought and rented houses in two different countries
such
as England and the
Wales between 1918 to 2011
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the diagram
there are nine years and eighteen Add a comma
diagram,
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rates
of households.Owned apartments grew significantly, however
rented Add a comma
however,
accommodition
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accommodation
accommodations
were
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rapid
decreased over the period shown. Change the word
rapidly
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counties had some fluctuations.
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rates
of owned apartments was about 22% in 1918.Fix the agreement mistake
rate
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, it rose to nearly a third percent
in 1939. Change the spelling
per cent
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in Add a comma
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1953
the percentage was unchanged. 40% was in 1961.And in 1971 was about 50%,Add a comma
1953,
same
with the rented accommodation. Between 1981 to 2001 the Correct article usage
the same
rates
gradually increased and became almost 70%. Even the percents were
went up before 2001, in 2011 the rate fault to 63%
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percentage
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The percentage
apartment
was almost 80% in 1918. Fix the agreement mistake
apartments
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Then
1953
they declined to less than 70%. Add a comma
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1961 to 1981 the Change preposition
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rates
gradually decreased. However
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percent
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