Should media networks such as newspapers publish people'as private information?

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It has been a matter of dispute

that

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whether

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newspapers should use

people

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's personal

information

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or not

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Because in

this

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era of

compeition

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competition

,each and every

news

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platform wants to stand different,so that their channels can get as much as TRP is possible to get, but, in

this

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rat race they forget about other

people

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's emotions and knowingly or unknowingly invade their privacy without their consent which can ruin other

people

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life

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carrer

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career

for a lifetime and because of which some

people

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have

commited

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committed

commented

suicides.

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my opinion,

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do not believe that it is fair to use other

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people'

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people life

people live

life

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just for the sake of their

newspage

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newspaper

success,but, if it is published with their permission,

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it is not wrong.I am going to support my point of view in upcoming paragraphs. when it comes to using

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information

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the information

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of others, there are two aspects that need to be considered

that

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apply

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what actually that

person

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is not going to be bothered with publishing

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data in public and

second

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the second

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thing

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apply

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that

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apply

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this

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news

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really

need

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needs

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to be reached to every

person

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of the particular country? In that

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case

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case,

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without having a second thought

information

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has to be published under any circumstances.

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: in the cases of rape ,robbery,

murder

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and murder

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because

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this

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these

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cases need

required

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to require

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attention of the youth,

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and Goverenment

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Goverenment

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government

,so that mandatory steps can be taken to mitigate

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this type

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these types

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of crimes which any nation needs to have zero

tolernce

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tolerance

for,

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as in the

case

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of Nirbhiya rape

case

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in Delhi where rape gang happened and with the support of honest media

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case

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got

highlighed

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highlighted

and rapists got their punishment after the struggle of seven years which can not be possible if

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case

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would not have been on every famous channel of the media. On the other side, if a

person

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is giving his or her consent to post specific

news

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about them,

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, it should not be an issue for others,as every

person

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has the right to choose what they want in their

life

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because some

people

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are getting paid for sharing their personal

information

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in other words

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, it is the source of income for them.

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: celebrities have to be in

limelight

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the limelight

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to get more projects,so,the more they famous are, the more work they get.I believe in

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situation

person

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needs

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need

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these channels which

helps

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help

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them

getting

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get

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jobs

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job

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opportunities so that they can grow in their

life

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, it would not be wrong to say that these platforms

playing

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play

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a crucial role in their career and at the same time they are

also

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doing promotions for their own pages ,so it is a win-win situation for both. In conclusion,

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reiterate my opinion that if

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the

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page has got the authority from the

people

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they are going to publish about

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it is not an issue,but if it is not permitted

then

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publishing

this

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news

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can hold the power to end

one'

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one life

life

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which is not tolerable at all and needs to stop at any cost.

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Coherence/Cohesion

The essay could benefit from clearer transitions between points and more organized paragraphs to enhance the reader's ability to follow the argument.

Task Achievement

Ensure that each paragraph thoroughly supports the main points with relevant examples and explanations. Expand on ideas where necessary.

Coherence/Cohesion

Avoid long, unclear sentences that might confuse the reader. Shorter and more precise sentences can improve clarity.

Coherence/Cohesion

Your conclusion effectively reiterates your main argument and summarizes your position clearly.

Task Achievement

The example of the 'Nirbhaya' case is relevant and effectively supports your argument about the necessity of publishing certain information.

Task Achievement

You have provided a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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496 words

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Should media networks such as newspapers publish people'as private information?

Your opinion

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In many countries government are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money.

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.