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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 learning extra
subjects
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 at the universities which does not have a direct connection with the specialty is required by several
students
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, the others believe that it is just a waste of
time
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both of these perspectives,
as well as
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 include my viewpoint. On the
one
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 hand, narrowing the focus to
subjects
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 which are related to the speciality may help to expertise in that field. The studies show that giving all attention to
one
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 topic requires the minimum
time
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 to be an expert rather than trying to focus on things which are more than
one
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.
Furthermore
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, some additional
subjects
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 may be a waste of
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 for
students
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.
For example
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, if a student studies computer engineering,
subjects
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such
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 as "Effective communication" can be replaced with
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 which is more connected to the technological side of the qualification.
On the other hand
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, these extra
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 can cause an interest in
students
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 which sometimes results in a shift in the career path. There are some records that
students
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 change their professions
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 as from law to historian or from electrician to businessman.
Additionally
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, supplementary courses have a positive impact on individuals even if they are not directly linked with the qualification.
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, courses about effective communication, businesses, or startups may positively affect participants' future careers in a good manner. In conclusion,
although
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 concentrating on speciality-specific
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 may promote more effective learning in a short
time
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, it
also
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 can prevent individuals from acquiring invaluable knowledge. In my opinion, even if it may have some irreversible consequences, giving the whole
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 and attention to studying for a profession is more expedient.
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
Improve coherence and cohesion by using a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly throughout the essay.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction provides a clear overview of the topic and sets up the discussion effectively for the rest of the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The essay includes a well-defined conclusion that summarises your opinion, contributing to a good sense of closure.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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