A friend who is living overseas should visit you soon and would love to stay at your place. Write a letter and explain - Why cannot he/she stay at your place this time? - Suggest an alternative arrangement. - Invite him/her to stay in the future.

Dear Neha, I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and high
spirit
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. I am delighted to hear that you are coming to stay with me at my home, but I would like to cut a sorry figure to share with you that the renovation work is going on at my home. You know very well my house is too small in size there is just two
bedroom
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bedrooms
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it is very difficult to
adjuct
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adjust
10 members
in
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my house as my
releatives
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relatives
also
came here because of Diwali Celebration.
Further
adding here that I will book the hotel for you which is near to my home. I will
also
stay with you.
Moreover
, we will spend our maximum
time
together and chit-chat with each other as we met together after
long
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time
. I will invite you next
time
at
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my new house as I know that you like my mother's food.
Besides
this
, you
also
like to spend quality
of
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time
with my family. I hope you
would
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be empathetic to enough comprehend the problem. Please don't forget
topay
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to pay
my regards to
uncle
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my uncle
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and aunt.
Yours
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Your
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love, Jas
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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity.
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Add more detail on the alternative arrangement suggestion to provide a complete response.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing parts of the letter are appropriate and friendly, establishing a warm tone.
task achievement
The writing tone throughout the letter is friendly and suits the purpose of the correspondence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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