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Why People Should Read Books do you agree or disagree

#people #books
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In my opinion, reading
books
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 is very important for every person. There are many reasons why I think
people
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 should read more
books
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.
First,
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when we read
books
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, we learn new things.
Books
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 help us to become smarter and more
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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.
For example
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, when I read history
books
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, I can learn about past events and understand why
world
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the world
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 is like
this
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 today.
Second,
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reading
books
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help
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 us to relax. Sometimes life is stressful and we need to escape.
Books
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 can take us to another world where we forget about our problems. I like to read fiction because it gives me good emotions and helps me to feel better. It is like watching
movie
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a movie
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, but more deep and interesting. But not all
people
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 like to read. Some
people
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 say that they don’t have time or they don’t like reading. I understand that life is busy, but I think reading even for 10 minutes a day can make
big
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 difference. It doesn’t take long, but it is very useful.
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, many
people
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 today prefer to watch videos on
internet
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the internet
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instead
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 of reading. Of course, watching videos is
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 good and entertaining, but
books
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 give us more deep information. When we read, we
also
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 think more and use imagination. It helps our brain to stay active and sharp. In conclusion, I think that everyone should try to read more
books
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. It helps us to learn, relax, and use our
brain
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. Even if someone
don’t
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doesn’t
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 like reading, it’s important to find the right book that can interest them. In the end, reading is good for everyone. .
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Try to elaborate more on the points you make, providing more depth and analysis to achieve a comprehensive response.
Introduction and Conclusion
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the main ideas.
Task Achievement
You use specific examples, such as reading history books, which effectively support your points about learning and relaxation through reading.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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