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The graph below gives information about the price in four countries between 1994 and 2004.

The graph below gives information about the price in four countries between 1994 and 2004.
The line graph compares 4 regions in terms of the
price
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 of
bananas
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 between 1994 and 2004.
Overall
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, the four regions experienced different trends in the time
period
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.
While
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 the
price
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 of
bananas
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 in Japan and France countries increased over time,the
price
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 of
bananas
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 in Germany and the USA remained stable
at the end
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 of the
period
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. The starting point of Japan was at 1.80 US dollars in 1994.
Then
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 the
price
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 of
bananas
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 experienced quick growth to 2.80 in 1995.Afterwards, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 decreased significantly to 2 in 1996.
After
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this
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, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 experienced fluctuations to 2.50 in 2004. Regarding France, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 in 1994 rate was at 1.60.
Then
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,the
price
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 of
bananas
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 declined slightly to 1.50 in 1958.Afterwards, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 experienced an oscillation to 1.55in 2004.
By contrast
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, it appears from the graph the beginning
price
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 of
bananas
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 in Germany was 1.50 US dollars in 1994.
After
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this
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,the
price
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 of
bananas
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 experienced some fluctuations.
Then
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,in 2001 the
price
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 of
bananas
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 reduced minimally to 1.30 in 2002.Afterwards,it stayed constant
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
Moreover
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,
it is clear that
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 in the USA the
price
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 of
bananas
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 was 0.80 US dollars in 1994.
After
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this
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,the
price
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 of
bananas
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 experienced moderate increases to 1.10 in 1995.
Then
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 fell from
this
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 position and
then
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 rose to 1.20 in 1997.Afterwards, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 decreased steeply during
this
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period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this, at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, bananas, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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