With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

A global issue is that oil and gas
resources
from open
areas
started to get
finish
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, and the
world
ask
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is asking
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for more oil and gas
sources
,
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and suggest to open the undiscovered
areas
.
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essay
is totally disagrees
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with the given statement. To commence, discovering new
areas
of gas and oil
sources
around the
world
can destroy several aspects of the environment. The journey to search new
areas
of non-renewable
sources
can require
to cut
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a large number of trees, it
may be
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a whole forest.
Moreover
, animals may need to emigrate from their habitat to an environment that
not
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suit the conditions they need to live in.
For instance
, dinosaurs disappeared because they lived in places
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not
offer
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their needs. As it causes
a
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climate change.
Secondly
, one day these
resources
will finish and the
world
will be in big trouble. To avoid
this
problem from earlier years, scientists should work and discover
renewable
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whether renewable
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resources
can do as much work as non-renewable
resources
do.
Additionally
, these discoveries can offer many job opportunities for people and lead to new
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in
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education.
For example
, students will learn how natural
resources
work and how can they make similar facilities that can control the
world
. In conclusion, opening close
areas
of natural
sources
can harm the environment and
animals
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animals'
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lives. As they are temporary
resources
that can not stay forever, and producing unnatural
resources
can do the same job and develop over
the
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time.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the writer's position on the topic, setting a clear direction for the rest of the essay.
task achievement
The essay attempts to explore both environmental and future-oriented concerns regarding oil and gas resource exploitation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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