With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?
A global issue is that oil and gas
resources
from open areas
started to get finish
, and the Wrong verb form
finished
world
ask
for more oil and gas Wrong verb form
is asking
sources
,
and suggest to open the undiscovered Remove the comma
apply
areas
. This
essay is totally disagrees
with the given statement.
To commence, discovering new Change the verb form
totally disagrees
areas
of gas and oil sources
around the world
can destroy several aspects of the environment. The journey to search new areas
of non-renewable sources
can require to cut
a large number of trees, it Change the verb form
cutting
may be
a whole forest. Correct your spelling
maybe
Moreover
, animals may need to emigrate from their habitat to an environment that not
suit the conditions they need to live in. Add a missing verb
does not
For instance
, dinosaurs disappeared because they lived in places did
not Correct pronoun usage
that did
offer
their needs. As it causes Verb problem
meet
a
climate change.
Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, one day these resources
will finish and the world
will be in big trouble. To avoid this
problem from earlier years, scientists should work and discover renewable
Correct word choice
whether renewable
resources
can do as much work as non-renewable resources
do. Additionally
, these discoveries can offer many job opportunities for people and lead to new level
Fix the agreement mistake
levels
in
education. Change preposition
of
For example
, students will learn how natural resources
work and how can they make similar facilities that can control the world
.
In conclusion, opening close areas
of natural sources
can harm the environment and animals
lives. As they are temporary Change noun form
animals'
animal's
resources
that can not stay forever, and producing unnatural resources
can do the same job and develop over the
time.Correct article usage
apply
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task achievement
Your essay effectively presents a clear position on the issue, but make sure to develop each point more thoroughly. Provide additional examples to illustrate your argument comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is mostly organized, ensure each paragraph flows logically and smoothly to maintain reader engagement. Consider connecting your ideas with clearer linking words or phrases.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the writer's position on the topic, setting a clear direction for the rest of the essay.
task achievement
The essay attempts to explore both environmental and future-oriented concerns regarding oil and gas resource exploitation.
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