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Nowadays, there are many reasons environmental pollution. What are causes and solution?

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The
issue
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 of
pollution
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 has been a disputatious and contentious matter recently. It has been argued that it has several side
effects
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 on both
people
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's health and the environment.
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, it is crucial to identify and examine the causes and suggest some possible ways to solve the problem. On the one hand, there are some main causes of
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 environmental damage.
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, the lack of education has made the problem
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worse.
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,
people
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 who are uneducated about the harmful side
effects
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 of
pollution
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 will contribute to damaging nature.
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, the health
effects
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 are very obvious. Some individuals will suffer from various types of diseases
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 as asthma and lung cancer
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 emissions of gasses and fuels.
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, the lack of laws has paved the way for careless
people
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 to destroy society. To illustrate, the presence of a large number of cars and factories without supervision increases the risk of
pollution
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.
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, certain solutions should be taken into consideration. Education is the main way to tackle the
issue
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.
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,
people
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 should be aware of the negative
effects
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 of
pollution
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.
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, the economic effect.
People
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 who are in polluted places will be unable to work leading to a decrease in production capacity and the country's outcome. Not only that but the government must
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 put strict laws and legislations to eliminate reckless actions. In conclusion, I point out that
pollution
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 is a serious
issue
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 because it causes devastating
effects
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 on
people
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 and society. I hope the government can raise awareness towards the hazards of
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issue
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 and must ensure steps are taken to prevent
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this phenomena
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 from deteriorating the future

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next; the flow between ideas can be slightly improved to ensure coherence.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the discussion.
task achievement
The essay presents both causes and solutions, addressing both sides of the task prompt, which demonstrates a comprehensive response.
task achievement
Use of relevant examples to support points, such as the economic and health impacts of pollution, adds depth to the discussion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • ecological balance
  • air quality
  • waste management
  • biodegradable
  • environmental regulations
  • fossil fuels
  • ozone layer
  • climate change
  • biodiversity
  • industrial emissions
  • contaminants
  • ecosystem
  • public transportation
  • deforestation
  • recycling programs
  • eco-friendly products
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