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The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.

The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.
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The two given graphs illustrate valuable information about the production of
electricity
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 in Ireland, and
also
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 five major consumption sources of
this
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energy
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. As it is evident there are four
electricity
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-producing resources: coal, gas, wind, and solar. Based on the pie graph coal is the main
energy
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-producing material allocating nearly half of the production to itself. The second place goes to gas which is crucial for producing more than one-third of the
energy
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. Wind and Solar
energy
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 contribute to
electricity
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 production equally which is 10%. Regarding the reasons for
electricity
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 usage, heating is considered the primary one using more than half of the
electricity
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.
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, lighting and kitchen appliances consume 20% and 15% of the power. the lowest consumption rates belong to consumer electronics and phone charging which is 5% for both.
To sum up
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, based on the given charts coal and solar
energy
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 are the main
electricity
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-producing sources.
Moreover
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, the primary
electricity
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-consuming devices are heating and lighting, and kitchen appliances.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity grid
  • Renewable energy
  • Environmental impact
  • Economy
  • Energy mix
  • Carbon emissions
  • Industrial consumption
  • Residential use
  • Government policy
  • Seasonal variations
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