The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population

in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for

2030 and 2040.
The graph provides information on the
percentage
of the
population
in four Asian countries namely the Philippines, Malaysia,
Thailand
, and Indonesia living in
Cities
from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
, it is
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that Malaysia is at the top of the chart from other countries.
While
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Thailand
has a lower the
percentage
of
population
living in
cities
. In terms of the
population
, Malaysia's
population
had 30% in the beginning, and
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massively to around 84% in 2040. And Indonesia stood in second position.
This
country will gradually rise from starting it had 12% in 1970
then
slowly increase and reach nearly 62% in 2040. The
percentage
of Indonesia's peak is almost above 60. For the remaining
percentage
of the
population
, The Philippines
population
lived in
cities
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32% in the beginning
in
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1970. The Philippines'
population
living in
cities
fluctuated many times.
Moreover
, it ultimately increases from 30% to nearly 55% in 2040.
On the other hand
,
Thailand
's
population
was the lowest among the above countries. In 1970,
Thailand
's
population
had in
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the
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19
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%.From next year it will increase by approximately 50% in the year 2040.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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