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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph provides information on the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 in four Asian countries namely the Philippines, Malaysia,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia living in
Cities
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 from 1970 to 2040.
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, it is
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 that Malaysia is at the top of the chart from other countries.
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Thailand
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 has a lower the
percentage
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 of
population
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 living in
cities
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. In terms of the
population
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, Malaysia's
population
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 had 30% in the beginning, and
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 massively to around 84% in 2040. And Indonesia stood in second position.
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 country will gradually rise from starting it had 12% in 1970
then
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 slowly increase and reach nearly 62% in 2040. The
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 of Indonesia's peak is almost above 60. For the remaining
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 of the
population
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, The Philippines
population
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 lived in
cities
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approximately
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 32% in the beginning
in
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of
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 1970. The Philippines'
population
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 living in
cities
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 fluctuated many times.
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, it ultimately increases from 30% to nearly 55% in 2040.
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,
Thailand
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's
population
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 was the lowest among the above countries. In 1970,
Thailand
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's
population
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had in
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the
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19
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%.From next year it will increase by approximately 50% in the year 2040.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, thailand, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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