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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #company
It is thought by some that
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 for a small
company
 is
worst
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 than being employed for a big one. In my opinion,
although
 small companies can offer great job positions, large companies are way better. I will give the reasons in the ensuing paragraphs. The first reason for my view is that
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 large companies are usually
internationals
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international
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, having offices located in other parts of the world, giving
to
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their employees the chance to travel overseas to
work
 for a period of time.
Moreover
,
besides
 the opportunity to gain that experience, it would
also
 allow you to develop great skills, as having to
work
 in another country is a great challenge, much more challenging than working in the country that you have lived your
enitrely
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entire
 life.
For instance
, a recent article suggests that employees who had worked for a few
moths
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 in another country, once they returned to their place of
work
,
they
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are capable
to perform
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of performing
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 better and are more efficient. Another reason for my perspective is that
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anbig
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a big
an big
company
 give you the opportunity to get a promotion.
Furthermore
, being promoted not only means having
a
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progress in your life, but it
also
 means
receiveng
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receiving
 a pay raise. Even though it does not mean that if you are working for a big
company
 you are going to reach a
managment
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management
 position, if you
work
 harder you will have more chances to scale, and have a better wage every year.
According to
 a recent survey, 80% of the population in Uurugay said that
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 they opt to first try to find a job in an international
company
due to
 all the benefits that
this
 could bring in their life.
To sum up
,
this
 essay has shown why it is definitely better to
work
 in a big industry. The main reason is overseas opportunities and more chances of promotion and pay raise
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task achievement
Expand on the reasoning in your main points with more detailed examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent use of vocabulary, particularly in contrasting points.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear position from the introduction, maintaining it throughout the response.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of arguments is maintained well, guiding the reader through each reason effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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