Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some poeple find it is a positive trend while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion.

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task achievement
Try to address the essay prompt more comprehensively. Ensure you discuss both viewpoints (positive and negative) as the prompt requests, and provide a balanced view. Additionally, make sure your opinion is clearly stated and supported with examples.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay better by having clear introductory and concluding paragraphs. Introduce your main ideas in the introduction and summarize them in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Create clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader through your ideas. This will help increase the logical flow and coherence of your essay.
task achievement
You've recognized the importance of computers in improving lifestyle and easing tasks, which is a relevant point to the topic.
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You touched upon the potential negative aspects of computer use, like the impact on socializing, which shows awareness of multiple perspectives.

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