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Some people today struggle to use modern electronic technology such as smart phones and computers. Why do you think this is ? What can be done to solve this problem ?

#people #struggle #technology #phones #computers
The advancement of
technological
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technology
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 has increased significantly and it has contributed to almost parts
in
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of
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 our daily lives,
however
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however,
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 some
people
faced
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face
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 an
obstacle
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obstacles
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 to
use
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using
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 it like
smart phones
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smartphones
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 and
computers
.
This
 essay will examine some causes of it and how to
adress
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address
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, there are numerous factors added into account why some
people
difficuld
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difficult
 to
use
technology
.
Firstly
,
Generation
 factors.
Currently
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 there
are
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is
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 various
generation
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generations
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 that living
side
 by
side
 in
the
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apply
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technological development, from
Baby
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the Baby
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boomerbgeneration
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boomer generation
whose
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born between 1957-1975,
then
x
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the x
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generation
 (1976 - 1980),
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the milenial
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milenial
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millennial
generation
 ( 1981-1996),
z
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the z
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generation
 (1997 -2012), and the
last
 is
alpha
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an alpha
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generation
 (2013 - now). All those
generation
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generations
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 have
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different
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differents
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different
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 experiences
to
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with using
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use
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apply
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the
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apply
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technology
,
baby
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The baby
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 boomer
generation
who have
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has
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 less
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experience
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experienced
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experience
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with
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of
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with
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technology
,
however
 in
this
 modern
technology
 they have to deal with it, because undeniable that
technology
become
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becomes
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primary
primery
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primary
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need
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needs
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need
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,
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for
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from
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for
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 paying bills,
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interacting
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interact
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interacting
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 with others, buying needs, and others.
Secondy
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Second
, lack of equipment.
People
 who can afford
for
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apply
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gadget
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gadgets
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 and
computers
 quite often
strugle
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struggle
 to
use
it
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them
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.
For example
,
people
 who live for a long time in
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a quite
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quite
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quiet
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 place or home town
which
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where
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 almost
things
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all things
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do
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are done
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 manually, those
people
 could be have
obstacle
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obstacles
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 when
use
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using
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 modern
technology
, because not used to
operate
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operating
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 them.
However
, there are some options
could
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that could
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be consider
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be considered
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 to
adress
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address
this
 problem
such
 as, The
goverment
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government
 can contribute
through give
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by giving
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 them training and socialization
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on
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how to
use
a
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apply
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certain
technology
 like smartphones and
computers
, considering that there are many public
service
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services
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provide
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provided
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 by
government
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the government
a government
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 that
use
computer
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a computer
the computer
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 and need a basic skill to
use
 it.
For instance
,
computers
as
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such as
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 ticket printing
now
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are now
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 commonly found in
buss station
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bus stations
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 which need basic
knowled
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knowledge
 to
use
it
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them
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.
other
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Another
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 solution could be
provide
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to provide
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an equipment
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equipment
a piece of equipment
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 in every place in
untauchable
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untouchable
 of
technology
 yet.
For instance
,it could
be
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apply
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start
from build
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by building
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 a computer laboratory in schools,
hence
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so hence
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 students have knowledge about
technology
. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
 we live
side
 by
side
 with
the
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apply
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technology
 many
people
 still
have
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strugle
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struggle
struggled
 to
use
 it, because
some
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of some
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 reasons, like
generation
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the generation
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 gap, and lacking of equipment. To reduce
this
 issue, giving them training and
build
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building
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 computer
laboratory
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laboratories
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 in small
town
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towns
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 could be options.
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