The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the information
of
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UK postgraduate and graduate
students
destination
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which is segmented into four groups,
include
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part-time employment, voluntary work,
further
study and unemployment after college in 2008. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is obvious that the inclination towards
further
education is remarkably high for both groups of
students
. The
graduated
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showed a significant orientation towards
pursing
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pursuing
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higher
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academic journey. Notably, 29665
students
’ participation in higher education made it a first option.
In addition
, part-time
job
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jobs
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and unemployment, with a small difference between them, were the second options for graduates. In stark contrast, only a few graduated
students
engaged in voluntary work, highlighting its low popularity. Moving to postgraduate
students
, they illustrated
the
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similar trend,
due to
the majority of
students
opting
further
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study. It is noticeable that 2725 postgraduates participated in higher education
that
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is close to the hired
students
in part-time jobs.
Conversely
, voluntary activities were the least popular
one
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among postgraduates, even considering
its
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date, it
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lower than that of the graduated.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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