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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advatantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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As the technological advancement is surging. The
World
 is becoming a new place with something new each day.
Such
 as America can be seen witnessing driverless
cars
 and taxis already.
Also
, many researchers say that the whole
world
 will be going to experience
cars
, trucks and all other
vehicles
 without any human drivers in upcoming years. As soon as
this
 came into
news
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the news
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, various
people
are
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were
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 happy about the pros, they
can
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could
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 have all over the
world
.
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 I believe, it is going to have a lot of loopholes too. Even though,
vehicles
 without
driver
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drivers
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 are going to be advantageous as there will be no need for
people
 to drive. They can just sleep or do anything when the self-driving
vehicles
 are doing
there
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their
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 work. But taking disadvantages
lightlly
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lightly
 would be a bad idea.
Hence
 there is
need
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 to look
on
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at
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 loopholes too.
Firstly
, these advanced
vehicles
 can bring a lot of unemployment to
world
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the world
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. As
people
 who use driving as their skill and earn by driving
uber
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,
trucks
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and trucks
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, they are going to have
setback
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setbacks
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.
For example
,
last
 week I read news that about more than 50,000
people
 all around
the
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Canada are estimated to lose
the
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their
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job
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jobs
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 as
driver
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drivers
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 because of self-driving
cars
.
Moreover
,
cars
 without drivers would definitely become
problem
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a problem
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 in
country
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a country
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 like Canada
as
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because of weather
condition
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conditions
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. As in
snow
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the snow
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 season, these automobiles will not be able to work as
appropriate
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appropriately
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 as human minds react to
particular
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a particular
the particular
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situation
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situations
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 and there is
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a possibilty
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possibilty
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possibility
 of
engine
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the engine
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stop
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stopping
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 working in severe
weathr
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weather
.
For instance
, in
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American,
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American
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America
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 only, about more than 10,000 Tesla self-driving
cars
 were recalled as they were proved to be unsafe and
unfuncationable
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unfunctional
 in snowy weather. In conclusion, it can be said, there are more cons than pros of
robot operated
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robot-operated
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vehicles
. That signifies that there is still
need
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a need
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of
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for
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 more modification and advancement
untill
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until
pros
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the pros
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outweighs
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outweigh
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cons
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the cons
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.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity. For example, separate the discussion of weather-related disadvantages from employment impacts.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and evidence to support your points, such as statistics or studies that predict the future impact of driverless cars.
task achievement
Refine the introduction by clearly stating your thesis (whether advantages outweigh disadvantages), which will help to focus your essay's argument.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced viewpoint, discussing both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, giving the essay a complete structure.
task achievement
Attempts to use examples such as the impact on Canadian jobs add depth to the discussion.
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