You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Climate
change
poses a grave threat to our planet, and there’s a dabate
on whether we should integrate it or actively combat it. I firmly oppose the notion that we merely coexist with it. Correct your spelling
debate
Instead
, I advocate that it’s responsible for us to
to take immediate actions to mitigate and prevent Change preposition
apply
further
impacts of climate
changes
.
Fix the agreement mistake
change
To begin
with, accommodating with
Change preposition
apply
climate
change
has a plethora of potential consequences,
because it is a passive approach. Living with Remove the comma
apply
climate
changes
Fix the agreement mistake
change
meaning
that we have to face up to numerous natural catastrophic consequences. One explicit Wrong verb form
means
affect
is that Replace the word
effect
climate
change
lead
to the rising of sea level. As a Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
results
, Correct the article-noun agreement
result
human’s
Change noun form
human
habitat
are damaged which may lead to mass migration, especially coastal inhabitants are those Fix the agreement mistake
habitats
whose
will mostly withstand the brunt of the damage. Correct pronoun usage
who
Furthermore
, climate
change
will lead to the alteration of temperature
of people’s living area. Rising Add an article
the temperature
temperature
will influence Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
on
the structure of crops and livestock production and habitat, some species that can not adapt will create Change preposition
apply
difficutlities
for people’s livelihoods. Correct your spelling
difficulties
For instance
, in India, higher temperature
and unpredictable rainfall patterns have led to decreased yields of rice and Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
wheats
.
To combat Change the wording
wheat
kinds of wheat
ears of wheat
climate
change
, governments should issue various effective measurements. Regarding regulation, green taxes must be applied on
industries that have Change preposition
to
a
excessive amount of carbon dioxide emission. Because the higher the taxes are, Change the article
an
they
more awareness they get to curb carbon release. Correct your spelling
the
Besides
, people’s perception about
Change preposition
of
climate
is significantly important, governments
should encourage their inhabitants to adopt Correct word choice
so governments
green
lifestyle by using more public Correct article usage
a green
transports
or prioritizing Fix the agreement mistake
transport
to
eco-friendly materials. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, leader’s
role is Correct article usage
the leader’s
a
key in helping alleviate Change the article
apply
climate
change
so that
the citizens must vote for Correct word choice
apply
Add an article
a leader
leader
who Fix the agreement mistake
leaders
fight
for Change the verb form
fights
environment
protection.
In conclusion, Replace the word
environmental
climate
change
is a pressing issue that cause
various negative effects. Change the verb form
causes
Therfore
, the idea of tolerating is not a viable and ethical option. Correct your spelling
Therefore
Instead
, we should pay attention and concerted effort to mitigate its effect by taking proactive steps to fight against climate
change
and protect our planet.Submitted by elsenglish16992 on
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coherence-cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow of arguments by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a singular idea and links clearly to the next. For example, elaborate more on the counter-arguments toward adapting to climate change, if mentioned.
task-achievement
Rephrase certain sentences to enhance clarity. For instance, refine sentences that may sound awkward or redundant for better readability.
introduction-conclusion-present
The introduction effectively presents the viewpoint against merely coexisting with climate change, setting a clear stance for the essay.
introduction-conclusion-present
The conclusion succinctly reinforces the main argument of the essay, summarizing the need to combat climate change.
relevant-specific-examples
You provided relevant examples such as the situation in India, which strengthens your argument about the adverse effects of climate change.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite