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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Climate
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 poses a grave threat to our planet, and there’s a
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debate
 on whether we should integrate it or actively combat it. I firmly oppose the notion that we merely coexist with it.
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, I advocate that it’s responsible for us
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to take immediate actions to mitigate and prevent
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climate
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 with, accommodating
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climate
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 has a plethora of potential consequences
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 because it is a passive approach. Living with
climate
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 that we have to face up to numerous natural catastrophic consequences. One explicit
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 is that
climate
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lead
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 to the rising of sea level. As a
results
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,
human’s
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habitat
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habitats
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 are damaged which may lead to mass migration, especially coastal inhabitants are those
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 will mostly withstand the brunt of the damage.
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,
climate
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 will lead to the alteration of
temperature
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 of people’s living area. Rising
temperature
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 will influence
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the structure of crops and livestock production and habitat, some species that can not adapt will create
difficutlities
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difficulties
 for people’s livelihoods.
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, in India, higher
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 and unpredictable rainfall patterns have led to decreased yields of rice and
wheats
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. To combat
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, governments should issue various effective measurements. Regarding regulation, green taxes must be applied
on
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 industries that have
a
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 excessive amount of carbon dioxide emission. Because the higher the taxes are,
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 more awareness they get to curb carbon release.
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, people’s perception
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climate
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 is significantly important,
governments
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so governments
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 should encourage their inhabitants to adopt
green
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 lifestyle by using more public
transports
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or prioritizing
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eco-friendly materials.
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,
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 role is
a
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key in helping alleviate
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 so
that
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the citizens must vote for
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a leader
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leader
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leaders
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 who
fight
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 for
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 protection. In conclusion,
climate
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 is a pressing issue that
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 various negative effects.
Therfore
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Therefore
, the idea of tolerating is not a viable and ethical option.
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, we should pay attention and concerted effort to mitigate its effect by taking proactive steps to fight against
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 and protect our planet.

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coherence-cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow of arguments by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a singular idea and links clearly to the next. For example, elaborate more on the counter-arguments toward adapting to climate change, if mentioned.
task-achievement
Rephrase certain sentences to enhance clarity. For instance, refine sentences that may sound awkward or redundant for better readability.
introduction-conclusion-present
The introduction effectively presents the viewpoint against merely coexisting with climate change, setting a clear stance for the essay.
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The conclusion succinctly reinforces the main argument of the essay, summarizing the need to combat climate change.
relevant-specific-examples
You provided relevant examples such as the situation in India, which strengthens your argument about the adverse effects of climate change.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate resilience
  • mitigation measures
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable practices
  • infrastructure adaptation
  • displaced communities
  • economic incentives
  • public health
  • international agreements
  • environmental regulations
  • biodiversity
  • future generations
  • green technology
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