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The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the average of how many
movies
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 are seen in a
theater
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 in a certain
year
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 by three types of
age
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groups
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. The units are measured in the number of
movies
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. 
Overall
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, it clearly can be seen that the higher number of
movies
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 watched in
overall
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 periods were by the
age
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group
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 18-24.
While
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 the lowest level of watched
movies
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 in a
theater
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were
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 the
groups
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 of 25-44.  In terms of the majority of
age
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groups
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 that went to the
theater
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 to watch films, in 2000 started at precisely 10, and in the following five years increased to 12.
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, in 2010 was relatively stable, before reaching a peak at 14 in 2015.  
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 the
age
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group
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 18-24 takes the first place, the
age
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group
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 45-65 stood at approximately 16.
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, in the next fifteen years, the number of people watching
movies
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 that
year
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 experienced a significant decrease and plummeted to 8 in 2015.
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, in 2010 both
groups
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 converged at 12. Regarding the lowest
groups
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 who watch
movies
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 in a theatre, the
age
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group
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 25-44 in the first
year
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, stood at 12, and in 2015 dropped to 10.
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in the following years decreased dramatically from 10 to around 5 in the
last
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year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, year, age, groups, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • average number
  • theater
  • per year
  • trends
  • noticeable
  • fluctuations
  • significant differences
  • similarities
  • patterns
  • younger
  • older
  • respectively
  • period
  • shown in the graph
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