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The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the average of how many
movies
 are seen in a
theater
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 in a certain
year
 by three types of
age
groups
. The units are measured in the number of
movies
. 
Overall
, it clearly can be seen that the higher number of
movies
 watched in
overall
 periods were by the
age
group
 18-24.
While
 the lowest level of watched
movies
 in a
theater
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theatre
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were
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was
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 the
groups
 of 25-44.  In terms of the majority of
age
groups
 that went to the
theater
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 to watch films, in 2000 started at precisely 10, and in the following five years increased to 12.
Moreover
, in 2010 was relatively stable, before reaching a peak at 14 in 2015.  
While
 the
age
group
 18-24 takes the first place, the
age
group
 45-65 stood at approximately 16.
However
, in the next fifteen years, the number of people watching
movies
 that
year
 experienced a significant decrease and plummeted to 8 in 2015.
In addition
, in 2010 both
groups
 converged at 12. Regarding the lowest
groups
 who watch
movies
 in a theatre, the
age
group
 25-44 in the first
year
, stood at 12, and in 2015 dropped to 10.
Next,
in the following years decreased dramatically from 10 to around 5 in the
last
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, year, age, groups, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • average number
  • theater
  • per year
  • trends
  • noticeable
  • fluctuations
  • significant differences
  • similarities
  • patterns
  • younger
  • older
  • respectively
  • period
  • shown in the graph
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