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The apartment that you have rented was repaired recently. Later, you discovered some defects in repairs. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain what the problem is suggest how it can be fixed say what you would like the landlord to do about it.

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Dear Sir, With due respect, I am writing
this
 to express my disappointment regarding the flat. It has been 6 months that I have been renting
this
 apartment and the interior of the flat is amazing. I love the view of city life as it is located in the suburbs of the main city.
Although
 everything is perfect except the heating system which is giving the trouble. Sometimes, it does not automatically change the temperature
according to
 the weather so I have to do it manually.
Therefore
, it is disturbing my sleep and causing sleep disorder which is affecting my health. As I know, you just repaired the apartment and again it needs repair. It can be fixed if you
will
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appoint an electrician from a reputed company who knows well about the issue. I would like you to provide me with a portable and durable fan that I can utilize for some time until the heating system gets fixed. I hope you will understand my situation and solve
this
 problem as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Harmeet Kaur
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task achievement
Be more specific in your suggestions to achieve a complete response. For instance, you may mention the timeframe for the repairs or any follow-up actions.
coherence cohesion
While your letter is nicely structured, there's room for improvement in sentence transitions to enhance the logical flow further. Consider using more cohesive devices like 'moreover,' 'consequently,' etc.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which suits the task well.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-executed, enhancing the overall coherence.
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