The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group.
The given table shows the information about the population of New Zealand in two different aspects: numbers and percentage changes, broken down into four different
age
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group
from 2011 to 2012.
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groups
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the majority of Linking Words
New
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the New
zealand
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Zealand
populations
were primarily Fix the agreement mistake
population
aldolescents
and young adults, Correct your spelling
adolescents
adolescent
whereas
Linking Words
that
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apply
of
the minority Change preposition
apply
were include
children and Wrong verb form
included
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the elderlys
elderlys
. Correct your spelling
elderly
elderlies
However
, it is interesting to note that the seniors with Linking Words
age
above 65 experienced Use synonyms
largest
growth over a year.
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the largest
To begin
with, a closer look at the table Linking Words
report
that figures Correct subject-verb agreement
reports
of
each Change preposition
for
demographics
had similar trends on average in both years. It is noticeable that in 2011, at roughly 1.577 million Fix the agreement mistake
demographic
peoples
, Fix the agreement mistake
people
citizen
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citizens
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age
15-39 Wrong verb form
aged
was
the highest number among Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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the other
other
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another age group
other age groups
age
group, followed by those Use synonyms
who
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apply
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age
40-64 at 1.331 and under 15 at 0.898 million people. Surprisingly, a year later in 2012, the trends of populations were alike with some minor rise and fall. Wrong verb form
aged
While
those under 15 and 15-39 underwent Linking Words
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a slighy
slighy
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slightly
slight
dropped
of 2-3 Replace the word
drop
thousands peoples
in 2012, Fix the agreement mistake
thousand people
others group
and Fix the agreement mistake
other groups
overall
figures were on the rise. With regards to percentage changes, citizens Linking Words
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age
above 65 Wrong verb form
aged
has
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have
significant
increase Correct article usage
a significant
up
to 4%.Change preposition
of up
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