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The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate a survey result about what activities
that
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European
adults
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 did during their free time in 1985 and 1995.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
people
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 in the given period enjoyed watching TV the most. In 1985, Most
adults
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 spent their time
to watch
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watching
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 TV which accounted for almost one-third of the share.
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,
people
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 interacting with friends and eating out accounted
more
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for more
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 than 20%. Approximately 18% of
people
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 chose to talk with family members during leisure time. Meanwhile, 6% of
adults
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 did other activities. In 1995, the number of
adults
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 who watched TV decreased slightly, but it remained the most popular activity with 30% of
people
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.
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, around a quarter of
people
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 played computer games (27%) and ate at a
restaurants
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restaurant
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/cafe (26%). The
amount
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number
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 of
adults
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 who talked to families dropped to only 8% and only 2% of
people
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 had other activities.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, people with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie charts
  • Leisure activities
  • European adults
  • Survey results
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Ten-year period
  • Walking
  • Cycling
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Percentage
  • Popularity shift
  • Team sports
  • Solitary activities
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