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Space exploration is considered by some to be a waste of resources, while others think it is essential for humankind to continue exploring the universe. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A host of scientists are exploring the galaxy. It is undeniable that
space
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exploration
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 requires a considerable budget and high-tech facilities. Recently, it has been a controversial issue whether
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 a large amount of money and time
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this
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 expedition is truly
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vital.
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 essay will discuss both views and reveal my orientation towards
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 statement. In terms of advocates' agreement with
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, there is no secret that the
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 has been jeopardized through awful issues,
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 as air pollution, the extinction of animals and plants, and water contamination.
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, in the future, it is assumed that the
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 cannot provide a suitable habitat for creatures;
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, searching for new planets and consuming money and equipment to observe other planets and check their living conditions are extremely essential, particularly for
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 generations, because they will undergo these challenges.
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, Nasa, a big and important organization, has sent a robot to
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Mars in order to check the possibility of the existence of water. Looking from opponents' perspective,
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exploration
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 will turn out harmful
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 the galaxy. Most of the spaceships and satellites, sent to explore
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space
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, are transformed into
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waste and
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 because their life span is short and
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 they are exposed to
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collision with other small rocks in
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space
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. In
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 regard, after a
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, the
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 will be a
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 of mess and spaceships' wastes.
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,
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 huge budget can be dedicated
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 the
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. To put it differently, scientists can consume their resources to solve the
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's issues and make it livable for humans and creatures
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 of changing the planet.
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, they can produce eco-friendly cars to reduce the emission of carbon dioxide and
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 treat water widely through adsorption or membrane
process
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. In conclusion, nowadays, there are numerous projects which are aimed
to explore
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the
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space
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. Despite its necessity, the
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 is suffering
with
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a
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plenty of environmental challenges.
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,
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 all the benefits of
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exploration
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, I believe that it is vital to prioritize the
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earth's
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 problems and
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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow of your arguments by ensuring that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, making the essay easier to follow.
task achievement
Ensure that all ideas are clear and comprehensively discussed. Some points are a bit rushed and could be elaborated upon to demonstrate a deeper understanding.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to back up your claims. While you've mentioned Nasa and eco-friendly cars, integrating more data or detailed cases can solidify your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, setting a strong foundation for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Each main point is supported by examples or explanations, helping to clarify your stance.
task achievement
You have addressed the task completely by discussing both views and providing your own opinion, which reflects a comprehensive understanding of the question.
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