Image for topic: The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

Image for topic: The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of
money
spent on five consumer products including cars, computers, books, perfume and
cameras
in two different
countries
(France and
UK
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the UK
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) in the year
of
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apply
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2010. Units are measured in
pounds
sterling.
Overall
, the
UK
spent most of the
money
on consumer goods than France in the period of time. Both
countries
spent most of their
money
on Cars
whereas
the least spent of
money
was
in
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on
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perfume in the
Uk
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UK
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comapred
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compared
to
cameras
in France.
Furthermore
, the significant difference in expenditure between
two
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the two
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countries
was on
cameras
. In terms of cars,
people
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the people
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of
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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spent around 450,000
pound
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pounds
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on
this
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them
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as opposed to the French at 350,000
pounds
.
Similarly
, The
british
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British
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was higher on books than
French
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the French
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(around 400,000
pounds
and 300,000
pound
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pounds
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respectively). In the
UK
, expenditure on
cameras
was double (350,000
pounds
) than the amount spent in
French
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France
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(150,000
pounds
)
On the other hand
, the amount of
money
paid for the remaining products was higher in
French
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France
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. Above 350,000
pounds
was spent by the
french
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French
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on computers which was slightly more than
British
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the British
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who spent exactly 350,000
pounds
. Neither of the
countries
spent much on perfume which accounted for 200,000
pounds
of expenditure in French but under 150,000
pounds
in the
UK
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, cameras, countries, uk, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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