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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the
number
 of
tourists
 visiting a particular Caribbean
island
 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, the three types of visiting experienced different trends in the time period. Compared to the initial period, the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on cruise ships,
visitors
 staying on
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the island
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island
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islands
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 and total visiting Caribbean
island
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islands
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 have increased. As the graph shows, the
quantity
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number
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 of
visitors
 staying on cruise ships
were
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was
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 nearly 250 thousand in 2010. Until 2012, it fluctuated from half
million
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a million
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 in 2011 to 250 thousand
of
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apply
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visitors
.
Then
, the
number
 of
tourists
 experienced a gradual increase to 2
million
of
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apply
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visitors
 in 2017. Regarding the
number
 of
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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, in 2010
they
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there
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 were approximately 1,5
million
of
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visitors
. There was a
leveling
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levelling
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 off between 2010 and 2011. After
the
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that
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 period, it experienced a significant growth to 1,5
million
of
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apply
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tourists
 in 2013. Following that, the
number
 of
visitors
remain
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 the same between 2013 and 2015. Afterwards,
it
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there
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 was a fluctuation during 2 years. Compared to the previously mentioned
tourists
, there was a rapid increase in the
number
 of total
visitors
.
At
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 the
beginning
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beginning,
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 the
number
 of total
tourists
were
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was
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 a
million
 in 2010.
Then
, it experienced a considerable jump to 3.5
million
 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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