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image-preview The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

image-preview The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about the proportion of dwellers in five
cities
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such
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 as
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart in Australia who bought fresh or
instant
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coffee
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 and those who went to the
cafe
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 for drinking in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that in
the
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all
cities
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, people prefer to go to a
cafe
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 with the exception of Adelaide.
However
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,
while
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 the number of individuals who want
instant
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coffee
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 was significantly more than fresh
coffee
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 in four
cities
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, the difference is much lower in
Sydney
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. The only
cities
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 where the participation levels differ greatly between
cafe
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 lovers and
instant
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coffee
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 lovers are
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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, which are far
popular
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more popular
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 with
cafe
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 lovers (with
the
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an
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 average of 63% as opposed to 46% in
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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),
although
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 purchasing fresh
coffee
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 is the least popular activity (roughly 42% in both
cities
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).
On the other hand
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, the difference between going to
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cafe
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a cafe
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 and drinking
instant
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coffee
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 is reduced (with
the
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an
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 average of 55% and 53% respectively) in
other
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the other
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 three
cities
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. Despite
this
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, the average of people in these
cities
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 who have a tendency to purchase fresh
coffee
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 is much lower than
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Sydney
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in Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, sydney, melbourne, instant, coffee, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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