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image-preview The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

image-preview The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about the proportion of dwellers in five
cities
such
 as
Sydney
,
Melbourne
, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart in Australia who bought fresh or
instant
coffee
 and those who went to the
cafe
 for drinking in
last
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the last
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 four weeks.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in
the
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all
cities
, people prefer to go to a
cafe
 with the exception of Adelaide.
However
,
while
 the number of individuals who want
instant
coffee
 was significantly more than fresh
coffee
 in four
cities
, the difference is much lower in
Sydney
. The only
cities
 where the participation levels differ greatly between
cafe
 lovers and
instant
coffee
 lovers are
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
, which are far
popular
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more popular
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 with
cafe
 lovers (with
the
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 average of 63% as opposed to 46% in
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
),
although
 purchasing fresh
coffee
 is the least popular activity (roughly 42% in both
cities
).
On the other hand
, the difference between going to
cafe
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a cafe
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 and drinking
instant
coffee
 is reduced (with
the
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 average of 55% and 53% respectively) in
other
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the other
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 three
cities
. Despite
this
, the average of people in these
cities
 who have a tendency to purchase fresh
coffee
 is much lower than
Sydney
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in Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, sydney, melbourne, instant, coffee, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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