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The graph below shows that the hospitals admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018

The graph below shows that the hospitals admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018
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The line chart compares the number of weekly hospital
admissions
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 in Fortsmith, Adlin, Stanton , Bardley and Oxley which are the popular hospitals located in a European country, between 2004 and 2018.
Overall
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, Oxley was the only hospital to see a decline in
admissions
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 between the
period
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 from 2004 to 2018.
In contrast
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, Adlin, Stanton and Bardley experienced a rise in hospital
admissions
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 over the 14-
year
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period
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. Oxely was unique in their admission figures remained stable over the
period
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. In 2004 , the admission for Oxely Hospital was under 250 per week which drastically decreased to around 110 in the final
year
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. Meanwhile, Fortsmith's weekly hospital
admissions
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 fluctuated at around 200 throughout the
period
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 .
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, the number of people admitted to Adlin Hospital rose dramatically from just over 100 in the first
year
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 to reaching a peak of exactly 250 in the final
year
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.
Likewise
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, the hospital
admissions
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 for Bardly and Satnton rose from over 100 in the first
year
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 to 250 in the final
year
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 and from under 100 to over 150 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words admissions, period, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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