An increasing number of professional, such as teachers and doctors are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons for this trend? What effect does it have on the countries professionals are leaving?
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for
this
trend Linking Words
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as financial and social Correct your spelling
such
as well as
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consequence
for those states.
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consequences
To begin
with, the financial aspect will be considered as the cause for changing a place of living. It is hard to deny, that teachers or doctors from developing countries may have Linking Words
significant
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significantly
income
in Europe or in the USA. Fix the agreement mistake
incomes
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an
average wage of a doctor in Kazakhstan, where I am based, Correct article usage
the
ten
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is ten
Secondly
, the opportunities for families Linking Words
such
as better education and healthcare in some areas are Linking Words
riviting
for professionals who are eager to move. The Correct your spelling
riveting
acsess
to Correct your spelling
access
best
schools and hospitals, Correct article usage
the best
equiped
with Correct your spelling
equipped
latest
tools Correct article usage
the latest
is not exist
in the majority of counties where Change the verb form
does not exist
people
live, so it could be Use synonyms
the
attractive reason for relocation.
Unfortunately, the effects of the phenomenon are negative. The leakage of brains leads to Correct article usage
an
shortage
of most needed specialists Add an article
a shortage
the shortage
such
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surgents
, professors, and engineers. Correct your spelling
surgeons
insurgents
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, an Linking Words
economic
may not create new technologists, Replace the word
economy
inventions
, and create additional revenues, which could brush up the industry. As Correct word choice
and inventions
a
example, India had many smart youngsters, who work in the US, increasing the US GDP. Change the article
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people
deteriorates Use synonyms
image
of a country. Add an article
the image
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people
look at Use synonyms
sucsessfull
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successful
relocants
and Correct your spelling
relocates
percieve
their original place of living as Correct your spelling
perceive
unconvinient
.
In conclusion, the financial cause Correct your spelling
inconvenient
convenient
such
as the higher salary and the social reason Linking Words
such
as better conditions for living are the most crucial factors for changing a residence. Linking Words
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