An increasing number of professional, such as teachers and doctors are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons for this trend? What effect does it have on the countries professionals are leaving?

There is no doubt, that
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have left from developing to developed countries. In
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I will explore the reasons
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this
trend
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such
as financial and social
as well as
the
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for those states.
To begin
with, the financial aspect will be considered as the cause for changing a place of living. It is hard to deny, that teachers or doctors from developing countries may have
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bigger
income
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incomes
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in Europe or in the USA.
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average wage of a doctor in Kazakhstan, where I am based,
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times less than the salary for the same position in the US.
Secondly
, the opportunities for families
such
as better education and healthcare in some areas are
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riveting
for professionals who are eager to move. The
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access
to
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schools and hospitals,
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equipped
with
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tools
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in the majority of counties where
people
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attractive reason for relocation. Unfortunately, the effects of the phenomenon are negative. The leakage of brains leads to
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a shortage
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of most needed specialists
such
as
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surgeons
insurgents
, professors, and engineers.
As a result
, an
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may not create new technologists,
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, and create additional revenues, which could brush up the industry. As
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example, India had many smart youngsters, who work in the US, increasing the US GDP.
In addition
, the escaping of smart
people
deteriorates
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of a country.
This
is because
people
other
people
look at
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successful
relocants
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relocates
and
percieve
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perceive
their original place of living as
unconvinient
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inconvenient
convenient
. In conclusion, the financial cause
such
as the higher salary and the social reason
such
as better conditions for living are the most crucial factors for changing a residence.
However
, it leads to negative consequences as bright heads
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brain drain
  • emigration
  • remittances
  • pull factors
  • push factors
  • skilled workforce
  • economic disparity
  • professional development
  • quality of life
  • socio-economic conditions
  • global workforce
  • career advancement
  • migration patterns
  • developed and developing countries
  • political and economic stability
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