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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The supplied bar chart indicates the various reasons
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 adults for choosing
study
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.
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, the provided pie chart illustrates the different ways of sharing
costs
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 for adult education. A glance at the graph reveals that the most significant
reasons
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reason
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 for studying is interest in
subject
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the subject
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.
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,
students
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 do not tend to go to university because of meeting people.
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, people think the highest amount of
costs
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 should be shared with individuals. Whilst, taxpayers are given the lowest percentage
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costs
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cost
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 share over the period. Exactly 40% of
students
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 decide to
study
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due to
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 their interest in
subject
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, (which is the highest amount of reasons over the period) just ahead of the percentage of
students
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 who want to
study
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 to gain
qualification
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a qualification
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 with 38%.
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, the proportion of
costs
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 for each course should be shared with individuals
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 40%, as opposed to employers with 35%.
In contrast
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, the percentage of
students
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 who prefer to
study
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for meeting
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to meet
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 others is only a fraction (9%). (which is the lowest proportion of causes over the whole year).
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, the amount of
costs
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should
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 be shared with taxpayers is a quarter (25%). (which is the lowest proportion of sharing over the period).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, costs, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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