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Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restraunts.Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home.which do you prefer?

In recent times, with the development of numerous
food
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 outlets, many individuals like to have meals outside the
home
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,
however
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, some
people
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 are still inclined
home
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made
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food
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.
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due to
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 hectic schedules and addictive
taste
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, many choose to intake at restaurants I personally
favor
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food
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 which is prepared
home
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 kitchen because of its quality and to save expenses. I will
explict
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explain
 the reasons for these choices
furthermore
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 In subsequent paragraphs. On one hand, the major factor in consuming meals at
food
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 buffets or
Caffe
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caffeine
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 is
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 an individual's busy schedule. Nowadays
people
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 do not get much spare time to Cook
food
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 every day as it is time-consuming.
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, preference goes for meals from outside
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, International students try to maintain
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 balance between studies and work but by neglecting
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet,they follow an easier path of eating outside.
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, the
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 prepared with a lot of spices and recipes
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taste
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 addictive which is mostly found on street carts.
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 to satisfy one's
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 ,
people
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 prefer outside
food
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 are health conscious and always try to prepare fresh and healthy
food
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 at
home
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 in a proper proportion to have a better quality meal.
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, studies
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, studies have proven
people
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 who eat homemade
food
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 are healthier than those who eat outside .
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,
due to
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 high expenses, many individuals find Preparing
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 cheaper
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 they want to Save money for other things which are more crucial. In conclusion, the
overall
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 decision to eat
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 outside or at
home
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 depends on a person's Personal choices
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taste
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,
due to
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 a busy timetable or to choose a healthier diet. But mostly I choose
food
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 which is fresh and made at
home
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 to save some money and to stay fit .

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You've attempted to discuss both sides of the argument before elaborating on your preference.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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