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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
#households #income
The chart bar illustrates critical information about the
number
 of
families
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families'
family's
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 yearly
income
 in the
Untied
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United
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State Of
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States of
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 America in 3 various
period
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periods
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starts
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starting
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
This
unite
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 is measured in millions.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that 2015 is taking the majority of
households
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household
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income
.
While
 2007 and 2011 have nearly the same statistics of
households
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household
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income
.
According to
 the data, the biggest annual
income
 in the
year
 2015
is
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was
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 $100,00 or more and
having
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had
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 32
million
households
, and the second amount of many is $25,000-$49,999
as well as
 less than $25,000, and the
number
 of
households
 is 27 and 28
million
 respectively.
in
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apply
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the lowest
income
 in the
year
of
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apply
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2015
is
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was
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 $75,000-$99,999 and
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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households
is
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was
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 15
million
. In terms of the
year
 2011 and 2007, the largest yearly
income
 in 2011,
2007
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and 2007
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is
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was
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 $25,000-$49,999 for the
year
 2011,
also
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and also
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 $100,000 or more for 2011. and the
number
 of
the
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apply
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household
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households
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 is 29 and 29.5 respectively.
as well as
 $50,000-$74,999 and $75,000-$99,999
the
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they
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 have the same
number
 of families about like 14 and 21.
In addition
, the yearly
income
 of $100,000 in
the
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apply
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2011 is a bit below the 2007 in -1
million
. and yearly
income
 of $25,000-$49,999 and less than $25,000 in the
year
 2007 is 25 and 27
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, households, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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