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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table compares six metropolises in terms of
railway
 opening date,
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of route, and annual passengers.
Overall
,
Although
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the Lnondon
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Lnondon
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London
railway
 is the oldest and the longest, Tokyo
overtake
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 it in the number of commuters per year. London Underground
railway
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Railway
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 which was established
at
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in
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 1863,
while
 , Paris station, opened 27 years later, has managed to attract 416 more travellers each year.
However
, Tokyo, the
tirth
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birth
 opened
railway
,
at
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in
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 1927, overtakes all stations in terms of commuters, with 1927 passengers annually using
this
 system. Los Angeles,
on the other hand
, is the newest
railway
, opened
at
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in
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 2001, 20 years after Kyoto's
railway
 was founded, and with 50 and 45 annual commuters respectively, they are the
least used
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railway
 stations. Looking at
railway's
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the railway's
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lenght
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length
 in more detail, London overtakes all countries by 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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lenght
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length
. Paris'
railway
lenght
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length
 is half of
the
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apply
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London
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London's
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.
Moreover
, with only 11
kilometers
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kilometres
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in lenght
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lenght
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length
, almost half of Los Angeles, Kyoto is the shortest
railway
 system.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, lenght with synonyms.
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