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The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps illustrate information about the
compare
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 of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.
Overall
, there was a considerable difference
on
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 the 2 floor plans of
conference
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the conference
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 between 2009 and 2010.
Initially
, the main and side
entrance
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entrances
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 remained stable in the two periods. The
registraion
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registration
situated
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was situated
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 between the two
entrance
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entrances
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 in 2009.
Then
, it was removed to beside
of
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the balcony, which was replaced by the refreshment in 2010.
In addition
, the balcony was behind the side entrance, which
was
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emerged with
lounge
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a lounge
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area
 after 1 year. It is readily apparent that
display
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the display
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area
 and exhibition
area
 were
on
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in
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 the
center
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centre
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 of
floor
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the floor
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 and they were dismantled. The exhibition
area
 was altered by the concert hall, which contained a stage and three seats.
Finally
, the wall, which was between
concert
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the concert
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 hall and
meeting
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the meeting
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 room, was destroyed to
creat
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create
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 an exhibition
area
 in the next year. The stage and seats were removed
into
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from
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 the concert hall in 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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