The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances andthe amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
The diagrams illustrate the
percentage
of households with electrical appliances
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machines
refrigerator
and Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
vacuum
cleaner
and the number of Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
hours
that households did their housework
each week
in one country in
1920 to 2019. Change preposition
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Overall
, the percentage
of households who had had by electrical appliances
increased dramatically in
each appliance, Change preposition
with
however
, the amount of doing
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housework
decresed
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decreased
period
.
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appliances
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machine
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machines
vacuum
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
percentage
by
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with
hours
housework
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of housework
week
; however
, there was a rise in all of these three appliances
in 1940 at 50% and 60% and a decline of hours
of housework
by almost 15% changes in 1920 to 1940.
The consumption of vacuum
cleaner
went up rapidly from 1940 to 1980 at 100%.Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
On the other hand
, the percentage
of people who used vacuum
cleaner
grew sharply from 1940 to 2000 and consumption of both of these Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
appliances
remained constant from 2000 to 2019. The amount of usage washing machine
experienced a fluctuation Fix the agreement mistake
machines
in
1940 to 2000 and Change preposition
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also
after that rose minimally while
the number of hours
of housework
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each Change preposition
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week
decreased steadily from 1940 to 2019 at
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to
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, appliances, vacuum, hours, housework, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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