Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages four tourists who visit such places?

Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult,
such
as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages
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tourists who visit
such
places?
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extreme conditions for specific periods will make you appreciate the little things in life which
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taken for granted.
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is because you will encounter how people meet their necessities by working strenuous labour
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tourists will examine places that nobody has reached before.
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one major problem of living in non-populated areas is the high possibility of getting lost.
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is because internet connections may not be available
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these sites.
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people rely on old radio
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to catch up signals and communicate with the outer world which can be technically demanding. In conclusion,
while
it is advantageous to
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explore
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extremely arduous locations it can
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lead to
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unfordable
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situations
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being
a being
undsafe
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unsafe
and getting lost.
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