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Despite the increased access to education, a significant number of people cannot read or write. What are the disadvantages without these skills? And What actions should governments take?

#access #education #people #skills #actions #governments
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It appears that nowadays in spite of the growth in access to education, a great number of citizens are still unable to read or write. In
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 issue and actions to address it will be discussed in detail. There are several disadvantages that some people still lack of linguistic skills.
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appropriate careers may require expert highly skilled performance employees
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 as lawyers, physicians or diplomats.
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 reason, literacy ability is instrumental in common expertise for individuals who want to gain greater employment opportunities. Another point to consider is that if citizens cannot read or write in their normal life, it will be an essentially national social problem.
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 is because people who have non-knowledge probability might be convinced simply by the scammers,
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 a recent study from the Faculty of Economics at Havard University, 80 out of 100 U.S. population tend to be highly deceived
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 knowledge.
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 growing tendency has several possible solutions which the government should take action to ameliorate people’s literacy skills. First of all, the national law
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should promote fundamental education.
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that children
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 under the legal age have to get into school from elementary school to high school. On top of
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, every classroom should have the same standard.
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, the government should provide training for teachers, and
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 they should be tested every half year.
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, lacking literacy skills may bring several disadvantages, including a low chance
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 some decent jobs or being easily cheated and
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 serious problem should be tackled. I strongly suggest that the government should consider
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 education laws and invest in training teachers and educational staff.
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Ensure that all claims and points are fully developed to improve the overall clarity and completeness of ideas.
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coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, offering a clear overview of the topic and a concise summary.
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The structure logically addresses the prompt by discussing both disadvantages and potential actions by governments.
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The essay attempts to cover both aspects of the question, addressing the reasons why literacy matters and proposing solutions.

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