People are surrounded by all kinds of advertising. Some people believe that advertising has a negative effect on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
We live in an era where advertising has become so massive and
gives
many impacts on people's lives. In Verb problem
has
this
essay, I will explain why too much advertising has more disadvantages than benefits.
There are many reasons why customers rely on how a company advertise their products
. Advertising is an effective way to introduce new product
to the market. Fix the agreement mistake
products
Moreover
, by using many methods to promote, certain products
could get higher exposure and lead to higher sales. For example
, a car that is
advertised on television and youtube
might deliver better Correct your spelling
YouTube
product
knowledge than other cars that only
advertised in car exhibitions. Add a missing verb
are only
In addition
, many kinds of advertising also
help customers to choose the best products
that suit them with
a fair price.
Change preposition
at
On the other hand
, several kinds of advertising also
have negative effects. For customers, too much advertising such
as telemarketing, email promotion, and ecommerce
sales Correct your spelling
e-commerce
notification
could make them overwhelmed and end up buying nothing. Fix the agreement mistake
notifications
Thus
, a company that wants to boost sales, should have a comprehensive marketing strategy to prevent this
. Furthermore
, massive advertising that currently happened
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happens
also
could raise consumerism. Because of advertising, people tend to buy unnecessary products
that they don’t actually need. On the other hand
, nowadays many companies use advertising for their bad marketing like using fake testimonials, product
overclaim
, and dishonest Correct subject-verb agreement
overclaims
product
description
. Fix the agreement mistake
descriptions
As a result
, there will be an
Correct article usage
apply
unhealty
competition in the industry.
Correct your spelling
unhealthy
To sum up
, advertising is one of the most favourable tools for a company to boost their products
. But if it isn't used wisely it could lead to many negative effects that might outdo it's
advantages.Replace the word
its
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coherence cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph follows a clear and logical progression. For example, the paragraph discussing negatives of advertising could be structured with a clearer topic sentence, followed by supporting details, and a concluding sentence.
task achievement
Strengthen the support for your points with more specific examples or evidence. For instance, provide concrete examples of how advertising can lead to consumerism.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a strong introduction that clearly states the writer’s position on the effects of advertising.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed both the positive and negative sides of advertising, showing a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the essay’s argument.