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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.consider both sides and give your opinion.

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It is aten said that boarding institution
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 to be
superior
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a superior
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 choice for
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educators.
However
,
this
 issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
also
 be made against the idea.
This
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 debate and give a concluding view. On the one hand, boarding school provides
excellent
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 study environment to learners, which leads to
their
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 better future. If they are growing in
this
 type of study environment, their chances of success in their career could be at
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.
Besides
this
, these
insitution
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institutions
institution
 assist pupils
to stay
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in staying
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 away from
technlogy
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technology
 gadgets
inhilving
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including
 video games or mobile phones. In Sweden, most of NEET clear students were from boarding schools.
As a consequence
,
this
 academic scenario can boost their fascination towards
academic
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.
Moreover
, other opponents
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 that boarding
school
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schools
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 might be responsible for the lack of bonding of
pupil
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pupils
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 with their
family
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families
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.
Finally
, sometimes
this
 type of situation can cause mental stability
,
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 because they solely
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study
for
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the whole time even without getting involved in outdoor activities. An example can be seen in India,
whenmost
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when most
 of the parents
prefered
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preferred
 to educate their children from boarding schools,
whereas
they
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 unable to utilize their most precious moments with them. It seems advisable that
although
, boarding institutions can lead to
better
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 future for
educatars
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educators
,
however
 staying away from family for
longer
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the longer
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 term would be
result
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the result
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 of
lack
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a lack
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 of mutual bonding between them.
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task achievement
Your essay could benefit from more specific examples and evidence supporting both sides of the argument. Try to include statistics, studies, or anecdotes that provide clearer support for your points.
task achievement
Some sections need better clarity and expression of ideas. For instance, phrases like "solely do study" and "inhilving video games" could be revised for clearer understanding.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between your paragraphs. Use more cohesive devices or transitional phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Provide clearer links between your main points and supporting details to ensure each paragraph convincingly presents its argument. This will improve the cohesion of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly sets up the debate and what your essay intends to address. This provides a strong start for the reader.
coherence cohesion
The essay contains a conclusion that effectively summarizes your main points and reiterates your perspective.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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