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In today's digital age, anyone with a smart phone can capture and share photographs. This assessability and photograph of demolishes. The value of professional photograph to extend to agreeor risagree

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Photographs are one of the best ways to save memories. In
this
 digital age,
pervasiveness
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 of
smart phones
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smartphones
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 passionate human beings to capture pictures and
due to
 the importance of
professional
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the professional
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 domain
remain
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 less popular. I partially agree with
this
 statement and
viewpoint
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 will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs. First and foremost, ease of accessibility is one of the primary reasons every second person has their personal mobiles with superior HD
camera
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cameras
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.
Thus
, it diminishes the need
of hiring
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professional
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professionals
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 or visit studios to get photos. As photoholic person take
picturesque
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the picturesque
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view
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views
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 with the aid of
high quality
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high-quality
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 cameras integrated into the
smart phone
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smartphone
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. To illustrate
it
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apply
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, here is an instance of
Survey
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a Survey
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 conducted by
Global
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the Global
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 Market of Technology [GMOT] that
approximate
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approximately
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 90%
sales
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of sales
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 of
Iphones
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iPhones
is
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due to
 an excellent megapixel of cameras.
Secondly
,
plethora
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a plethora
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 of paid or unpaid editing apps and
softwares
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software
 are available for download on the Apple store.
Moreover
, various sorts of visual effects and filters turn
out
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the basic portrait
to
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stunning
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a stunning
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 view.
This
 advancement is able to reduce
perceived
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the perceived
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 need
of
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for
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 highly qualified
cameraman
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cameramen
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.
Furthermore
, market saturation is
also
 the reason behind giving less publicity to the highly qualified studios. As millions of people share their amateur photography on
the
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social apps like Instagram or
Tiktok
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TikTok
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.
This
 leads to
challenging
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a challenging
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 situation for skilled
photojournalism
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photojournalists
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 to stay in the market as their competitors can provide
at
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cheap offers or even free.
However
, there would be no comparison for
professional
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a professional
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 eye on storytelling.
Glinting
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The glinting
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 comparison
that
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often lacks in
the
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casual
phototaking
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photo taking
photo-taking
. Artistic vision can capture
emotions
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the emotions
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 and
theme
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the theme
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 of the snap.
For instance
, cinematographers are hired
on
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at
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 weddings that
makes
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make
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 diligent video clips including
bride
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the bride
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 and
groom
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 family members.
Consequently
, regardless of different online tools or superb
camera
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cameras
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, professional photographers
differs
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differ
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 from others
due to
 the
extra-ordinary
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extraordinary
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 imagining power that they use in their work.
Overall
, undoubtedly experienced photographers
comes
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come
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 with
unique
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a unique
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 presentation of snaps and movies but I still believe that
accessibility
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the accessibility
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 of owning a phone diminishes the value
to hire
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of hiring
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 renowned visual
artist
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artists
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.
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Make sure every paragraph contributes to the overall argument.
task achievement
Ensure that each main point is supported adequately with relevant examples or evidence.
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Consider providing more specifics in examples to make them more relevant to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has an appropriate introduction and conclusion, which frames the discussion well.
task achievement
The essay generally addresses the prompt and offers a response that somewhat answers the question.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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