You have been offered a place at a university and wish to find suitable accommodation. Write a letter to the accommodation officer including the following information: •the type of accommodation you wish to find •some details about yourself •any special requirements you may have and any other relevant information.

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Dear sir, I have recently received confirmation that I have gained a place on the M.Sc. Computer programming course at your university,

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September, and am writing to you with regards to arranging for

accommodation

, My student registration number is 123545. I understand that you offer

accommodation

both on-campus and off-campus, the letter costing between 15 dollars to 30 dollars a week. I would prefer to live off-campus in a house with 2 or 3 other students, each having their own room, ideally within a 30-minute walk of the university. I have budgeted for rent of 20 dollars per week. if

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possible

, I would like to remain in the same

accommodation

for the

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entire

duration of the course, i.e. two academic years. I do not have any special

requirement

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, but would prefer to share the

accommodation

with students my age (I am 25) who are actively interested in

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. I myself am a keen rugby player. I do not mind whether the other students are on a similar course to me or not. I would be

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grateful

if you could send me details of two or three

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at your earliest convenience. Yours Faithfully, Andrew Scott.

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Task Response

Consider checking your spelling and punctuation, as there are a few typos such as 'strating' instead of 'starting', and 'etire' instead of 'entire'.

Task Response

Ensure that monetary values like rent should be realistic according to the expected living standards; you might want to check the currency and actual costs.

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The letter effectively fulfills the task requirements by including personal details, specific preferences for accommodation, and an enquiry for more information.

Coherence and Cohesion

You maintain a polite tone and include all necessary elements, like a greeting and a closing, which enhances the overall presentation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

197 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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