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People in the community can buy cheaper products nowadays. Do the advantages outway the disadvantages?

Currently, cheaper
products
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 may be purchased by society.
This
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
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goods
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.
Firstly
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, inexpensive
products
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 are affordable and counted on poor
people
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.
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, consumers tend to buy reasonable
goods
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,
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if they see two different
products
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 with varying prices, they will give preference
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the cheaper one.
In addition
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,
people
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 who have limited money or low income would buy these
products
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.
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, nowadays, lots of employees who do hard work, as a rule, receive little currency and
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 not
allow
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them
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to acquire more expensive ones.
Secondly
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,
such
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products
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 might have low quality or could be used previously.
Goods
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 with an
expired
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expiration
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 date are a key factor that influences quality.
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, consumers are prone to look for dropped prices as they want to keep their money.
However
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, they frequently do not pay attention to the expiry date.
Moreover
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, many
people
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 are
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inclined
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 to believe that it means nothing, but it is a delusion. As an example of
this
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, expired
products
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 affect the quality of a product, and if
people
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 buy them, they will have some health problems like stoma
ache
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aches
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. Another problem is that the product has already been used. It is typical for consumers to search for sensible prices, and often they may find secondhand
goods
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. On the one hand, it could be a great opportunity to possess
such
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products
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instead
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 of overpaying for unused ones.
On the other hand
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, in
products
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 like these, there might appear some issues
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, numerous
people
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 are willing to buy pre-owned computers because they want to save money for something else.
But after
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 they bought it,
initially
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 it would work properly;
however
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, over time problems may be revealed because of the period of time
this
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 device was used. In summary, speaking about cheaper
goods
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, we must take into consideration advantages
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 as availability among
people
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 with low income. And disadvantages
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such as
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 low-quality and secondhand
products
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. Considering all
above
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the above
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, I can infer that
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the advantages
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 do not outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of cheaper
goods
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.

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The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, presenting the topic and summarizing effectively.
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The response addresses the essay prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages.
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