Education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that
education
should be free for everyone. I completely agree with
this
opinion and I think that higher
education
should at least not be as expensive as it is now. First of all,
i
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believe that a person should have the right to higher
education
, but to a greater
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it depends on the range of his material opportunities. The only effective motivation
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learning —
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interest in learning.
Due to
paid
education
, a person cannot afford to try himself in new and different spheres and determine for himself in which profession he will succeed. In most situations, even if a person can afford to pay for higher
education
, because of too high prices, he cannot choose exactly what he dreams of. He will choose an
education
that he can afford and the specialty that he wants to get may be very expensive and impossible.
Secondly
,
i
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support the idea that higher
education
should be free
,
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because it provides real freedom of choice of profession. It is necessary to introduce completely free
education
in higher
education
programs and to make
education
possible for everyone who really wants it, based on everyone's abilities. Only under free
education
can you get highly qualified people who will love their work and be real professionals in it. In conclusion, paid
education
, unfortunately, has been around for many years and it will not be completely free, but it should not be as expensive as it is now.
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  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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