Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing a game is fun only when you win. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People believe that there is fun in
game
only if the person Add an article
the game
a game
win
. Change the verb form
wins
This
essay agrees with the statement because winning a game
can give the winner
prizes
and pride making the winner
think that the game
is much more fun.
One of the reasons is that there are several game
that can give Change to a plural noun
games
prizes
, including money
, such
as poker
and mobile-phone
Correct your spelling
mobile phone
game
. Nowadays, almost all Fix the agreement mistake
games
person
who Fix the agreement mistake
people
lives
in the city really need Correct subject-verb agreement
live
money
. One of the way
to achieve Change to a plural noun
ways
that is
through game
Fix the agreement mistake
games
such
as poker
where they can put
Verb problem
make
bet
, play Fix the agreement mistake
bets
the
Correct article usage
apply
card
, calculate the possibilities and win higher Fix the agreement mistake
cards
prizes
. For instance
, the
famous Correct article usage
apply
game
center
Fix the agreement mistake
centers
such
as Las Vegas where it is famous for the
Correct article usage
apply
poker
game
. Another example is through mobile phone Fix the agreement mistake
games
game
where Fix the agreement mistake
games
gamer
Fix the agreement mistake
gamers
joining
the tournament and Wrong verb form
join
hence
got
Wrong verb form
get
money
prizes
such
as DOTA or Mobile legends
.
Another reason is that it can give the Capitalize word
Legends
winner
feeling
Correct article usage
a feeling
pride
and Change preposition
of pride
title
such
as Chess game
. Chees, which famous
for Add a missing verb
is famous
it's
championship, is always known for Replace the word
its
it's
Replace the word
its
title
as Grand master
where the Capitalize word
Master
winner
not only take the money
but also
considered Add a missing verb
is also
famous
Correct article usage
a famous
title
so that
everyone wants to compete with Correct word choice
apply
entitled
Add an article
the entitled
an entitled
winner
on
a Change preposition
in
game
. With it's
system, everyone wants to play and master the strategy so that they Replace the word
its
could
Wrong verb form
can
excell
Correct your spelling
excel
on
Change preposition
in
this
game
. For example
, Lots of citizen in Moscow really likes to play Chess and even have the
Correct article usage
apply
game
in Fix the agreement mistake
games
the
public Correct article usage
apply
space
Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
such
as park
.
In conclusion, playing Fix the agreement mistake
parks
game
can become so much fun Fix the agreement mistake
games
is
only when the person Unnecessary verb
apply
win
because Change the verb form
wins
its
not only Correct pronoun usage
it
give
the Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
winner
money
but also
pride and title
Fix the agreement mistake
titles
such
as poker
, mobile-phone
Correct your spelling
mobile phone
game
and chess.Fix the agreement mistake
games
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task achievement
The essay provides a satisfactory response to the task but could benefit from a deeper analysis of the topic. Consider exploring reasons why games might be enjoyable even when one does not win, to present a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and conclusion, which reinforces the argument. This could improve the overall structure and make it easier for the reader to follow your position.
task achievement
While the essay provides relevant examples, it would be helpful to explain these examples in greater detail and connect them more explicitly to your main arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
The use of specific examples like poker, mobile games, and chess adds credibility to the points made.
task achievement
There is a clear attempt to address the prompt and provide a reasoned opinion.
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