The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000

The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000
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The bar chart provides information about the amount of wind-generated
energy
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in four countries in a time period between 1985 and 2000.
Initially
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, India was the lowest producer of wind
energy
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, followed by the United
States
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, with the other two countries falling in between.
At the
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end
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of 2000, Denmark captured the position of the United
States
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and became the highest producer of wind-generated
energy
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. In 1995, India produced the lowest amount of wind
energy
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, 200
megawatts
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, compared to other producers.
Then
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, the
production
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gradually increased, reaching 1200
megawatts
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by the
end
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of 2000. Germany clearly outperformed India,
initially
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surpassing the
5400 megawatt
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mark in
energy
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production
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. It
also
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demonstrated an improvement in
production
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, culminating in an
energy
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output of over 800
megawatts
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. From the beginning of the time period, the United
States
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demonstrated dominance in
production
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, reaching its highest capacity in 1990 with an enormous
production
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of 1600
megawatts
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.
However
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, the
production
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experienced some disruption towards the
end
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of 2000, ultimately reducing to approximately 1500
megawatts
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. Denmark held the second-lowest position at the beginning of the time period, with a
production
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capacity of nearly 200
megawatts
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.
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, they significantly refined their strategy over the years. For that, the
production
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rate increased gradually, and
at the
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end
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of 2000, the country became the table-topper with a
production
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amount that was over 1600
megawatts
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—the same number the United
States
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gained in 1990.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however, initially".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, states, end, megawatts, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • wind energy generation
  • megawatts (MW)
  • renewable energy
  • energy production
  • growth trend
  • decline
  • technological advancements
  • government policies
  • historical data
  • relative contribution
  • energy mix
  • comparison
  • renewable resources
  • sustainability
  • capacity
  • installations
  • annual production
  • percent increase/decrease
  • between 1985 and 2000
  • notable changes
  • country-specific trends
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