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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in five parts of the world in 2006.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in five parts of the world in 2006.
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The table shows the amount of
consuming
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 and
growing
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 information
of
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potatoes
 in five parts around the globe in the year 2006.
Overall
,
Asia
 led the sector of potato cultivation,
while
 Europe was at
the
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 peak in terms of consuming
potatoes
 in 2006. The other regions showed different types of attitudes toward cultivation and usage. South and Central America required over 23 kg of
potatoes
 per person to meet their demand,
while
 Africa had the lowest consumer requirement at about 14 kg per person.
Asia
, North America, and Europe followed with amounts of approximately 26, 58, and 96 kilograms per consumer, respectively.
On the other hand
, in
case
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 of cultivation, because of
suitable
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 climate and environment,
Asia
 was the table topper, producing just over 131 million tonnes of
potatoes
 in 2006. Europe was not much behind
Asia
,
proucing
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producing
 a little bit higher than 126 million tonnes. Among the parts of the world mentioned in the list, the poorest producer was South and Central America, with production of over 15 million tonnes of
potatoes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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