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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summers. write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In yiur letter - suggest how you could help her in her home - say why you would like to do this work - explain whenyou will and will not be availvable.

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Respected Mrs Barrett, I am writing to tell you that I saw an advertisement by you which says you are looking for a helper at home in the upcoming
summers
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summer
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. I
Ponder
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Wonder
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,
this
 is something I can help you with as I am a full-time student without any job. I often struggle
spending
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 my spare time after
studies
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my studies
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. Since I know numerous works at
house
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the house
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 because I lived in a big family so I think I can be of great help to you. As I said, I don't work
thus
 I feel slovenly most of the time at home. When I saw your advertisement I thought
this
can
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 be a good idea to keep myself
ocuupied
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occupied
 plus I am okay helping with the
house work
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housework
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hence
 I decided to do
this
 work. Having said that, I can begin
from
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in
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 the early
summers
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summer
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,
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that is
 starting
of
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in
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 May. Even after attending my
classes
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classes,
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 I am available almost the whole week
instead
 of Mondays and Thursdays .
Also
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 I can come to help you in the evenings and the early mornings as required. I hope to hear back from you soon. Regards Simran
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
logical structure
Maintain logical progression in presenting the information, and ensure ideas are ordered naturally.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately included and well-presented.
suitable writing tone
Your writing tone is polite and suitable for the task. You addressed Mrs. Barrett respectfully and provided relevant information.
complete response
You clearly identified the purpose of the letter and addressed all parts of the task, including how you could help, your motivation, and your availability.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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