The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures below depict the process of manufacturing
sugar
from the sugar
cane.
Overall
, the whole operation consists of seven procedures which will be fully described in the following from growing the plant to drying and cooling to produce the sugar
.
To commence, sugar
canes are grown and nourished within 12 to 18 months which are then
harvested either by harvesting vehicles or manpower. Normally, harvesting by mankind would be more time-consuming. Then
, the harvested sugar
canes are crushed in a specific machine with a pair of wheels spinning which produces the a
sugary juice. Correct article usage
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In addition
, a funnel-shaped limestone filter is used to purify the liquid. The filtrates are then
evaporated into syrup by continuous heating in a giant jar. After that, the heated syrup undergoes centrifugation that isolates the sugar
crystals from the syrup. Finally
, the separated sugar
crystals is
are put into a tank for drying and cooling and Unnecessary verb
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turns
to turn Verb problem
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them
into Correct pronoun usage
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the
edible Correct article usage
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sugar
which is well-packed and is assessable
distributed not only in supermarkets but Replace the word
accessible and
also
in the storks
stores.Fix the agreement mistake
stork
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