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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people’s #lives
Many people think that the main purpose of science is to improve our
lives
, but others think that science is not only about improving
lives
. If we look at history the first inventions are some kind of curved rocks .And through deductive thinking, we can understand that it was made to hunt more easily. Through
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 people are inventing new
things
 to make our routine more easier. Cars, washing machines and other
things
 made by scholars made our routine much easier and no one can deny that,
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now we have much more time than our ancestors
On the other hand
, there are some inventions
such
 as atomic bombs and weapons and so on, as I think they do not benefit our routine.These
things
conversely
 transform our routine into
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 and I think there is no reason for inventing them.They caused so much harm and killed so many
routine
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 to just fulfil someone's ego that wants power. In conclusion, I am strongly convinced that not all of the inventions improve our
lives
. Inevitably there would be some
things
 that harm or vice versa that benefit. So the purpose of the invention solely depended on the authors.If they want to save the world,they will do it.If they want to benefit their country, they will do it.
However
, a person who
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 consider the well-being of the whole world may merely destroy the whole world. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s
lives
. To what extent do you agree or disagree with
this
 statement?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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